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FanDanny 2009-09-30 . chapter 4
So I don't remember if you answered back to my last review or not haha no worries! real life gets in the way (believe me I know!) Thank you for another amazng chapter! HURRAY! Aww but poor Scarlet :( hopefully there will be some peace for her soon! But ah! I knew that wasn't the last of the mowhawk guy! I know we pretty much know nothing about him other than he's the lead singer in a band, likes piercings and expiremental hair colors but I like him ^_^ Thanks again for such an amazing chapter and hopefully Tucker's fiery passion for Mei won't turn into a problem *wink wink nudge nudge*
~FanDanny
class.act 2009-09-10 . chapter 4
Loved this, though it had quite a few typos.

This seems to be just getting better and better. The plot, the characterization, it's all so good. Moriah's metamorphosis and the resulting reactions were absolutely hilarious. I'm looking forward to reading more of Troy.

There's a lot of unsaid stuff between these seven. Dunno how you're going to resolve all their issues, but can't wait to read more. Please update sooner next time!

P.S. A bit confused over why this story's called Shattered China, since it seems to be about all seven of them and doesn't just focus on Mei.
smile at the sun 2009-09-10 . chapter 4
well... I sure hope Mohawk-boy isn't bad...
and there are quite a few love triangles here, I wonder what's going on with Ruben, too. great writing. please update soon
summers-end 2009-09-09 . chapter 4
I really like the group's dynamics! Everyone seems to fit together and they all really care about each other. Although it also does seem like they only ever see each other as real people and everyone else as below them.

I hope this blue mohawk boy is around to stay. All the other members' inclusion in the group was explained so easily, I'd love to see him as a new member who has to work for acceptance, just to see how the group reacts.

Can't wait for Ruben to come out of the closet! And what's going to push Mei and Jermaine to see each other as more than friends with benefits? And are you going to explain what happened between them when they dated? So many questions to answer...

Update soon!

summers-end
Blackrain7557 2009-09-09 . chapter 4
I retract my previous statement about wacked up relationships...that doesn't nearly cover it. This cannot work out in a good way anytime soon. But then again Tucker and Jer's reactions were laugh out loud funny and somewhat ridiculous.

Again, this should all prove very interesting, looking forward to it.
aflores90 2009-09-09 . chapter 4
Awesome chapter. It's been so long I had to re-read. Haha. I got the update email or whatever, and was like, "What is this story?" But can't blame you for getting busy. Who doesn't? So I hope you update sooner rather than later. Although with school that might be tough. Anyways, hope everything is good and REALLY can't wait for the next update! I love your story :)
Blackrain7557 2009-09-09 . chapter 3
Well managed to read The Melody of Love in about 2 days, and decided to continue on with Shattered China, which i have to say you have an extremely good start on.

It's a little wacky, and strange but overall a good start to one heck of a wacked up relationship. Looking forward to the updates, and hopefully I'll be leaving reviews as it goes along.
sessluver 2009-06-25 . chapter 2
Why does it have to be Holden and Ruben? And why did Ruben have to cheat on Scarlet for so long without telling her? And Shattered China is a very ominous title. Something bad is gonna happen to Mei, isn't it? Their whole gang is gonna fall apart, right? Ah! You make me so depressed. T.T
aflores90 2009-05-27 . chapter 3
You are pretty much awesome. I got done reading one of your other stories last night and went straight into this one and I can't get enough. Can't wait until the next update!
ramshaia 2009-05-25 . chapter 3
This story is really good! Though sometimes it gets kind of confusing...but i still like it. Update soon!
lunabella 2009-05-18 . chapter 3
I just recently started reading your stories and this one so far is my favorite. Your writing has improved a lot and the unique characters make it even better. Looking forward to more :)
FanDanny 2009-05-10 . chapter 3
Their relationship is so weird! At times it seems like they could almost be brother and sister, but just before it gets there they shift gears into couple and then pull a u-turn into best friends.
Also please don' tell me Moriah is gonna sleep with Jason >_< I don't know why that is a possibility in my head but it just is! I'd hate the thought of him using her to break up ther group or something like that!
Ruben and Holden still concern me but I'll be patient to see wher eit goes. Poor Scarlett is suspecting by this point, especially since you mentioned they had a little spat >_>;;
Anyway! Thanks for updating at lightspeed (especially considering your busy schedule with school!) and I can't wait till the next chapter!
smile at the sun 2009-05-09 . chapter 3
wow. by the way, i can't access Chapter 2. I don't know why. great chapter. It seems like Mei and Jer can't keep away from each other... though I don't know why he was with the blonde sophomore, and Mei really likes the seduction game, doesn't she? ;) I wonder who Moriah likes...
so they're in senior year now? please update soon.
class.act 2009-05-09 . chapter 3
Very weird relationship, indeed. And I like that you've put so much thought into the back-stories of the school, and even the secondary characters, like the teacher in the first chapter or the principal. What I loved was the way you used Jason to illustrate the genuineness of their friendship.

Again, I felt that the writing was a bit choppy, and that, at times, you put a bit too much attention to detail.

And yes, there were plenty of mistakes in this chapter. But you're forgiven :) Update soon!
nautyangel 2009-05-08 . chapter 3
omfg this is an amazing story. i almost had a fing orgasm hahahaha. only thing i would suggest would be to run it through grammer and spell check before you load it up here... other then thant cant wait to read more!
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