I think this story was incredibly cute and you did a good job writing it. There were so many priceless moments and I'm glad I was able to read it all. Congratulations.

So fluffy! So cute! Egads, this is sweet. XD I figured Luke was a mathmatical genius... it just seems something that he'd do, haha. He certainly didn't seem to be the kind of guy who'd need any sort of tutoring, anyway. This story was so sweet! I know I already called it that, but it's true. Thank you so much for posting it! :D

I loved this story!! So believable, sweet and endearing. Thanks!

I just have to say I'm quite proud of myself for reading this story in under a day.And jeez did you have to make the ending so amazing?! I started hyperventilating, worried that it would really be the end. But this story was absolutely, and utterly Mind blowing. :)

I think This stories gonna make me cry...
Anyways Oh my Gosh! That's just like holy crap. and when I read it was a boy I was just like "ha! Take that!" I'm quite childish. :)

I l-l-l-love this story :) And do not trash Sailor Moon! lol She's freaking amazing, I loved that show as a kid. hahah I'm gonna be sitting here for a long time trying to get thorugh the rest of this story today.

sounds like a good beginning, couldn't find any spelling or grammar mistakes but that's the editor's job anyway, I would however like to point out that while Brooke and Ashley seem to have authentic voices Adelaide doesn't seem to. Is this on purpose? Is she supposed to seem insecure? I am also wondering why you chose the name Adelaide? does she hate that name, or does she love it? Is she considered cool at school, or is she an outsider? As you can see I have a million questions about Adelaide which means that you have created an engaging and interesting character! that's a good thing! I am asking you these questions because I want to help you keep the story interesting, not because there is anything wrong with this chapter. The only thing I would say about this chapter is that it was just a tad unclear when you switched from the present to the past. I really like your first sentence, it made me lol!

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I COMPLETELY fell in love with your story. From Adelaide and Luke to Strawberry Fanta, your characters are so unique and different, and at the same time, I found it really easy to identify with them. A lot of authors forget that their main characters have flaws, but you displayed theirs plainly, and it made the story that much more realistic. Anyway, I'm glad to have met them.
Your story was well-developed, and I like the fact that the main focus wasn't just on Adelaide and Luke--we got to see the whole picture.
And I also like that you kept us hanging about Adelaide and Luke's relationship throughout the whole story (even though it HAD to happen) because most authors out there would have them dating by chapter five (I'm guilty of this too...).
The only thing I would have liked to see more of was Adelaide's friendship development with Kitty. At first we see a lot of her, but after that, she kinda disappears...
Anyway, I loved the story, and keep up the good work! :)

Your story absolutely blew me away - the characters were well developed and the plot didn't have holes, congrats! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Keep Writing!

Loved it! I'm going to go read the sequel now...

Great job writing this story.

I liked the twist ending,

and Luke's interaction with the main character.

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Thanks for bringing it to fictionpress :)

Ahh, omg... it's taken me like, months to get around to reviewing this. (It's Sasha from Undiscovered, by the way, lol.)

So, I read the whole story quite a while ago (maybe two months or so) and college has taken over my mind since then so details will be fuzzy, but I'll try my best to give you a nice review.

Um, basically I loved the story. The idea was unique and I loved that you didn't make the entire story about Luke and Adelaide. Sometimes it really bothers me that writers disregard the rest of the characters' lives. At any rate, I think your characters were marvelous (including Sadie, who was a tad annoying at times, lol). I'm not sure why, but it seems like I never got a good feel for Lilia. It's probably just me, though. Luke was great and I'm glad he had some flaws. It made him more real and believable as opposed to the formulaic love interests that writers seem to always write about. His mysophobia was a nice touch and the marshmallows bit was hilarious.

I'm trying to find things that I had issues with, but I can't really remember now... *sigh* I'm sorry, lol... I really should have reviewed this when I read the story. Anyway, I really liked the whole thing, honestly. It was interesting enough that I managed to read it in a day and a half and I fell in love with the characters and their relationships with each other. Great job, really.

I can't wait to start reading the sequel!! =]

-Sasha

I loved it!! It was so cute, funny, charming and just great:D Luke and Adelaide are the best

lol, the birth scene wasn't -that- bad.

very cute :) I love the family relations, like I said earlier, and yeah, there are a lot of little things that make this story a little bit more realistic than most.