This chapter is a lot more clarifying than the first chapter in your original draft of this. I like that Logan tells her his name right off the bat and we don't have to wait for him to reveal his name like we did in the original. Hopefully this rewrite of the story will have more structure, sorry, but your original draft did bounce around a lot and had no structure, no firm plotline, but I'm certain this time around, you'll get it right and clear up some things that were before not clear to us, the readers. I really like this story and can't wait to see Alana & Logan fall in love all over again in this rewrite. UPDATE!

Wow, woot this is good start of the story, it kept me like 'whahh, whats gonna happen next?!'

I did like it, a lot!

awesome so far! i reli like it! omg! i cant wait 4 u 2 update dis n everything i never wanted!

Wow, interesting beginning. And yes, I can see the improvement in writing style. I don't know the old beginning, but this was a very, very good one! I hope to see more of this up soon =)

Liking it so far..update soon :D