All of these pieces. I just can't begin to describe how truly amazingly written they are! Well done, I really enjoyed reading all of these poems :D

I liked this, good work (:
Faith

I like how you use the word parenthetical in parenthesis. That was a nice ironic touch. I also think this piece is a great ending. The descriptions are really powerful. especially the part about the maggots. Awesome job.

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"is what (reality)"... I like how you italicized real here. That was a really nice formatting thing. All of the formatting is really great in this piece. I like how the first and last line fit together with the periods.

The word scrawl was a nice choice as well. I also thought the whole hearing, covering your ears, hiding eyes thing was interesting, but going from eyes to listening seemed odd.

"and draw silly drawings of the lives we'll never lead"... I thought the repetition of draw was a bit too much.

I do like the piece though. The second part is especially relateable. And it's a situation that has been described before, but you did it differently. Nicely done.

I think the first paragraphs is a bit of a runon. I might separate it into two sentences. I did like the piece though, as always, your descriptions are really wonderful and I like the formatting. Although I think the quotes and the parenthesis seemed a bit overkill. Still, a really great piece.

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"Spin the world on its shuddering axis." The word 'shuddering' is so magical here--loved it.

"And remember how the boundaries and the hate cannot be viewed from space." Brilliant line! Strong message! Whatever happened to the idea of 'a brotherhood of man'?

ha! bravo with that clever ending!

good piece, i liked it. (:
Faith

"The crimson mess oozing down all the little white daisies." Great imagery! It's almost as if the poor little daisies lose their innocence when the blood coats them. Interesting.

"Because this is what reality is." Powerful tone. Striking line.

Love this. The first line gives this simultaneous image of beauty and ugliness, or maybe just a beauty that's fading and turning into something darker. Nice. Very nice. Keep writing! :)

good job, these pieces are good (: keep it up!
Faith

"Rotting yellow stars." Striking. Provocative.

"Chimeras of hope." Excellent word choice. Chimeras are fascinating beings.

"Don't fall, little one." I squirmed when I read this--it's so haunting and magnificent. Wow!

"Blue morning light." Beautiful imagery. I also loved the contrast between light (morning) and darkness (the grey brick walls). :)

i love the imagery of "rotting yellow stars" ...it's just great because it gives a bad connotation to something we always find so beautiful and mystical.
and "chimeras of hope and jaded illusions" is just fantastic wording.

but the ending parentheses have to be my favorite; the line is so powerful and insightful.
great job!