Wait whaat?! No, how sad! I like Daiki though! He's so sweet and thoughtful... At the same time a stalker, but a nice one! A really really nice one. I liked the story though ( ; - ; ). I would try and convince you to change it from being a oneshot to a series, but it won't work huh? Wahh, how sad... But I still like it a lot!

It's a big predicament for Aya huh? I hope it sorts out! And I hope she falls for Daiki cuz he's so nice and sweet! :D Then again, you're the author, I'm fine with what YOU decide! :D

I see grammar errors, but I'm sure Kay K. Dancealot already pointed them out (I read her critique).

I'm not quite pleased with how it ended, since... Well.. The story's incomplete.

Even if Daiki did leave her alone like that, there would still be the question--what happens next?

Nevertheless, I find it a good story. A must read even. :)

I'd love more of these coming soon!

Okay, I'll give you an in depth review.

Typically, the word "awesome" is not used to describe someone's height. It's used more in phrases such as "That movie was awesome!" or "Have you heard this song? It's awesome!" Basically, awesome is generally used as a synonim for "great." However, it isn't an incorrect usage of the word, it's just not used that often and sounds slightly awkward. I'd suggest something more like "awing." Also, instead of "image of intellegence" it'd make more sense to say "appearance of intellegence."

I'm only being nitpicky because although it's annoying (trust me, I know how annoying it can be) it really helps you learn the language.

Grammer problem: "I’m in love with him since the very first day of my high school." Wrong verb. A person cannot say I am in love with you since second grade or whatever. They say I have been in love with you since second grade. I know it doesn't seem like a big deal, but it really stands out.

You go back and forth between present tense and past tense a lot and it sounds very awkward. I'd suggest getting someone who speaks better english to read over the whole thing with you before you post it.

"and then I felt like he bends down and I just saw face is close to mine!" I have no idea what you're trying to say there.

What does "Ohayou" mean by the way?

The part where she said she liked his back, at first I was wondering if that was a lost in translation thing because it just seemed so weird... But then I read more and it made sense. It added character and emotion to the scene in a creative and honest way. I liked that.

It's "Though," not "Thou." Thou is a term that basically means "you" but has a venerable tone to it. I've heard it most often used during prayers when people talk to God and also when reading scriptures such as the Bible.

One thing I don't really like is that other than the fact that he's hott, I don't understand why she likes him. It makes her look shallow. And you don't "though," you "thought." Yes, it makes that big of a difference.

Six o'clock is late? Yeesh, what time is early?

You don't give someone a blush, you make them blush. Blushing is something a people does on their own, so if you think about it you can't give them something they do naturally, you make them do it.

Oh my gosh, that's so funny how it's the wrong guy. :) I could just see the scene unfold in front of me.
Oh man, and that is so funny what the guy responded. Lol.

Why does she care if he looks stupid if she doesn't like him? Or is she one of those girls who are too nice for their own good? :)

By the way, you repeat the same things over and over again. It's redundent.

You should reset your settings so that it's set to english grammer and spelling, it will help a lot.

It's so true about the chocolate. Chocolate is a sign of amazing-ness (not a real word).

I still don't understand why she's so in love with him. Other than his good looks, what is so attractive about him? I feel like you could give this girl a picture of him and she'd be totally content.

Aw, the guy she doesn't like is so sweet. Too bad she doesn't like him.

"I' am" That doesn't work at all.

You cannot be shock. That's like saying you are love with someone as opposed to in love with someone.

Aw, that's cute. She's changed.

o. Ironic twist at the end! So cute! This story is filled with cute, ironic, awesome twists!

It's "afar" not "a far". I know it's a little confusing, but it's one word.

"I couldn’t move my hands slide down his arms." What the heck is she doing here?

Oh, the ending was so sad. :...

I actually liked the ending the way it was. I thought that it was overall a cute and clever story. One thing: I beg you to get a beta reader who speaks english to review it.

Awesome story!

~Kay

great!!
feel pity for daiki, sui-chan wished that Aya should just pick Daiki and not Wataru
and, sui-chan knows that Aya will definitely fall for Daiki in the end ^^
anyway, please update soon...
bye bye :]

Um improving i like it. It take mo so long to read this cause I imagine how the action done by the characters.Its so scenti but i hate the ending .Hanging ending it was.I hate that girl so stupid hahaha joke...well good job but i hope she confess also her feelings with kazama and i hope they kiss in the ending woh...I love it

Kyaa...you're good at romance...and the title suits it best!

sugoi sugoi Roan-chan!

Great Story!
I'm impress~~
You improved well...
You describe well now too...
There are some mistakes and missing words...
But, we can't avoid that...
Anyway, Great Story!! It has a nice plot!!
The feelings in the story reach me!! Surely it did~
You really improved
Great job and keep it up!!
(^_^) Ohh~ I enjoyed reading it...