Cliffhanger. :o
mm... at least the girlfriend (or will be ex?) is nice... :/ Maybe she hooks up with that drunk chick? ;D -shot-
You! Give me descriptions for these two losers here. xP
I'm giving you fanart for your birthday which I missed. -.-

i didn't want it to end - i wanted to know what happened. and i like chris.

You made me emo yet again! D'=

Aww, sad :( But I

Cute story.
It makes you really want to know what happens next. Wasn't that what the story really was all about? But that you can imagine what will happen next is wonderful!

*~ Wow, that was amazing with the unspoken details. All the near invisible connotations really makes you work your imagination to get a feel of the moment. Well, I guess it seemed like a moment since it was rather short, but beautiful! I like how it's circular, a very well-done play! ~*

Is it bad that the first thing I thought of after "If you don't want to leave the room when I bring her up, don't." was 'threesome!'? Probably. I'm a bad person. XD Great thing about writer roommates: you can be as antisocial as you want! And write stories about each other. Hee. KINKY stories...okay, I'll be good. I rather like the girlfriend. She seemed friendly. I bet she hooked up with that drunk chick later. That way, everyone's happy in the end! :D Cuz obviously Chris is gonna jump Keith when he comes back...heh. The girlfriend was just for venting sexual frustration. He pretended she was Keith. Yup. o.o Ick, cold room... I think it goes without saying that I still love your writing like a cup of hot tea on a rainy day? :3

What angst! What drama! Oh the intrigue.

I don't like it when stupid people are nice. Stupid people that you should hate but don't. It's sadmaking.

I like Keith though.

Hope he gets some.

Aw, now we'll never know what he thought of it! You are cruel, Miss Lainy, but so, so brilliant. I like so much in this. Like the staccato rythym of the keys and how he hates that she's so nice.

oh... I think I get it now... so what keith wrote was the entire thing and then the last part (where chris wakes up) is actual real life and he picks it up and reads what is written above. (or something, lol). Great, like, I love your style. its so magical, its so realistic its so... beautiful and tragic and happy and just, oh gosh. You should go get published my dear, you're amazing! *hug!*

This was a beautiful piece. i found it to be very inspiring

omg! slkgjl;sdfkgaa;d
please! you cannot seriously think of leaving this a one shot can you? no, there is a definite need for more! i fell in love with this story at the point when he says

"She can't be nice. Keith can't stand her being nice. He can't stand her anyway, but he'd never admit it."

that has happened to me one too many times, i want to hate the new bf or gf of my ex, and then... they're nice -__-
it ruins my mood, i want to hate them, but i cannot!

so please, for my sake, put up one more chapter, (happy hopefully)
you know you want to!

A very interesting idea, I like it! And it successfully distracted me from my exam revision XD

June
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D: It was lovely, but to leave it there... way to make us suffer -.-

I liked it, though. Don´t delete it!! >:o