Wow! Okay now I get it! The prologue I mean...It makes more sense once uve read the last few chapters..

This story is very well-written and flows on its own...

For some reason when I started reading this story I thought that it would end well...but having read all that, I'm hoping Briana will be able to free herself from Ian and the world he forced her into. Now I understand how Briana is being "abducted" - it's like a downward spiral to hell...I hate Ian, I don't think he really loves her; to me he's like a manipulative liar...he just needs her.

I really wanna know what happens next!

This fic is amazing. I never was into those Greek myths but I like how you're retelling the tale of Persephone and Hades...

I like your writing style xD All your other fics have lured me in and left me wanting more xP That's how I got addicted to Equinox... Hehe...

I guess you can sort of get Briana... How she wants to get out of her shell... Or something like that. For some reason I feel like I'm going to become like her when I reach high school... *coughs* But that's another issue =D

She's so in love with Ian that she did all that stuff >.< Meh. I don't make any sense but... :3

Keep on writing *cheers*

Wow! This seems like such a powerful story! I can clearly see why you're a nomiee for SKoW's round 8. Your descriptions are fantastic and the passion behind your character is very heartfelt. Nice work!

Ah, and this is your 100th review! Congrats!

i am very very excited to be reading this. you are amazing at writing and just...aah!

Aw her mommy =[
Good chappie, that's all I got to say.
Update soon!

bri is going to get addicted isnt she.. :[

I swear this is one of the best characterizations I've seen here on Fictionpress.
The subtle manner in which Ian manipulates Briana- not only is it remarkable, but also rather scary.
And I'm finally starting to understand what the Epilogue was about. I read it about five times after you put up chapter one, but failed to make head or tail of it.

You always create characters so real that I can't help but wonder if they've got real life counterparts. When I read your work, I'm confident I'm gonna love it. Which justifies me adding you to my favourite authors list.

This review has been long overdue. Especially since I've had Ghosts Underwater has become my personal favourite since the day I read it. I don't know what else to say really. You deserve reviews from more experienced people than me. I think your work should already be out there for everyone to see- published.

Cheers,
Winged Unicorn

P.S: I think it's time you changed rating to "M". Especially since we've been seeing sexual acts and repeated drug use last two chapters. What do you think?

Wow Ian is a weirdo!
I hope he doesn't go crazy in the future and try do something like have them be killed together, he's already trying to turn her into an addict!
And I had a feeling Landon was going to be coming back some time in the story, it's just a matter of time...
But, anyway I can't wait till you update again!

Good chapter. Keep it up and update soon!
Faith

WHY BRIANA WHY? She almost didn't do it, but gave in =(

Gosh I love her mom!

Great chapter!

This is an amazing story. Keep writing! =D

And yea--I agree, Ian is perhaps worse than Nathan. With Nathan, what you see is what you get (even tho he didn't seem abusive in the beginning), but with Ian, it's like he's the dark-side, and he wants to taint all goodness with his blackness.

I have a feeling to why Ian provided Briana her second fix. I think he WANTS her to become addicted, and so in turn becomes emotionally and financially dependent on him, so she'd NEVER EVER leave him. It's twisted but true!

Love the description used about what Bri felt when she had her 2nd fix--lol, I almost wanted to become a heroin addict there and then. But I'm sensible, so I resisted =D

Awesome story!
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Ian is changing, I can tell. It shows in his interactions with Briana; he's very different when he's talking to her, ever since she found out about his drug use. I guess maybe he's not changing so much as letting his lighter personality slip...if that makes sense. Like, before Briana knew he seemed like this sweet, innocent kind of guy, and now he just acts indifferent and then makes up for it later with apologies that sound false, to my ears. It makes me want to take him by the arms and shake him!!

The dream was interesting. Very spooky. I hope it wasn't one of those dreams Briana has that predict something. I suppose it could be a dream that shows her what's already happened--she's become like a ghost of herself, drifting away from her mom. Still, I wonder if/when she'll fully realize it (if she hasn't already), and what she'll do about it.

Ian was REALLY insistent that she try heroin again. Almost makes me think that his plan all along was to trick her into trying it once and then seducing her into trying it again until I fear she becomes just as hooked as he is. I don't trust him...

The scene with her Mom was really sad. I was surprised that her Mother let her go off with Ian so willingly, but then again she IS 18. Such a shame though that Briana was too stubborn to even give her Mom a hug when at the beginning of the story they were so close. Somehow I get the feeling that she is going to regret that desicion.

I see, well I'm looking forward to the revealing of Ian's mysteries. Just how screwed up is he really?! ;) I wonder what you've come up with this time. Knowing you it must be something deliciously brilliant and lunatic. BTW, thanks for the little summary on what Ian does all day long. ;)
I was hoping Briana wouldn't take the shot. But I guess she had to. At first she seemed fairly strong but now she really seems weak, now I wish I could help her. XD
She's so stressed out with her friends, her mother, Ian's behavior and the drugs; it's surprising she hasn't collapsed yet.
So, they talk about God when they're high?! That's funny...XD
Will Bri also grow faith in Christ like Raina did in Equinox?
I wonder how come she's got those visions?! Are they just a trait of hers or is there something more to them? I love it when she's got precognitive dreams and tries to riddle them out. It's sad she ignores them and keeps them from Ian although that's understandable.
Did Ian tell Lola out of desperation or is he simply this rude?
I wonder how Bri looked when she got to school!? You said she looked awful but how so? Did she have hollow cheeks, bloodshot eyes or dark circles around the eyes? I want to be able to have a mental picture of her, that's all. *halo* I mean you described her clothing well and how she suddenly bought expensive stuff but she doesn't anymore, does she? I thought she wore her old and normal clothes again since Ian is broke anyways. But does her body change? Like, is she losing weight and so on?! I'd love it if you'd describe her current state of appearance. Please? :D
You said Landon plays a bigger part?! Will he try to separate Ian and Bri and get her out of bad situation and stuff? Like he's her thread connecting her to the normal world?! Ugh, I'd hate that but I'm just going to see what you have in mind. :D
The mother reminds me of Dumbledore... She doesn't blow up but seeing her sad is way more painful than screaming would have been. She's making Bri feel bad, adding on Bri's list of self-hatred. Bri blames her losses on herself, doesn't she? She blames Ian for not caring enough and being irresponsible and stuff but not for losing her friends and mother, etc.
I'm having lots of fun reading your story. Thanks for the update I really loved it! :)

Yeah, I had a feeling Landon was coming back. . . Strange feelings, heh. And I love that you included Bollywood music. I love it.


Needless to say this story is depressing, but I guess that I'm just attracted to stories like these. Whats up?

Ian seems so distant recently, even though he feels closer to Brianna himself. It's weird.

update soon.
love.