I love how tactfully you write angst. Most people slather it on so thick you can't see past the blood, but you have this finesse for it, only allowing your character enough suffering to keep the scene tense. Great chapter. I pity Caspian.

Ohh, the plot thickens. Nice work with minimal character contact here, just enough to drive readers crazy. Still don't have anything constructive to say.

Am I irritating you yet? Thank you for the explanatory chapter, it cleared up a lot of the plot, yet still left almost everything in the dark. Paradox much? another fine chapter, with fine characters, fine dialogue, and fine scene setting.

And it just gets better as I go! Your characters are engaging and well rounded, and your descriptions really put the reader right there with the crowd. Excellent.

What a well written opening! I'm intrigued, and that, my friend, takes talent.

I really like how this chapter was written. Caspian has such a great character, with his lost-prophetness. You write him really well.

I'm really interested to read more and learn about Lelina, too.