I thought it was pretty obvious it was about the sun, actually. "The night's here"

Very nice. I like how universal it is. :D

Hmm. I can see where this could be a reference to the sunset but its' not clear. I don't like that the summary seems to be intentionally misleading. In fact much of the peom seems to be straying the reader to think of a woman. The imagery is distinctly human rather than sky.

I also don't like the aparrant diconnet between the two stanzas. It makes perfect sense if you tihnk of it as a sunset - but I didn't. So I spent quite a bit of time tring to justify the blushing and the goodbye.

Thanks agian for your RM contributions!

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this is short, sweet, and very clever. i'm not sure i would've known it was about the sunset if you hadn't written and author's note. however, i love the metaphor, it fits perfectly.

in terms of criticism, i would just like to have seen more, maybe more descriptions, because it does seem a little short. the sunset is so beautiful and there is so much more that can be said. but then again, that's just my opinion.

nicely done, keep it up!

I love the fact that the sunset 'blushed'-it's as if the sun's a woman and her lover's the darkness. It was very cute and romantic, in my opinion. :)

I like that is it cute and short. I think if it was any longer it would be demeaning on the meaning of a blush. The last two lines however seem somewhat out of place. Not sure why, but when reading they lose the flow a little.

It is very true though. It made me smile about myself.

-Areku

I really like the length of it, because any more and it would detract from the simplicity and any less, there would be nothing there.

I would would re-word "Staining creamy color pink." to 'Staining the creamy color with pink' in order to make it flow better. Also I would make "night's" 'night is.' My reasoning consists of the fact that the rest of the poem sounds fairly formal, and then you get to that part and find a bit of cognitive dissonance.

Yep...That pretty much sums it up.

Excellent, though short, piece.

Thanks for the review! [[I have issues with stanzas :P]]

i just wish it weren't so short.