I find this poem a little too general. I think I'd like it more if it was narrowed down to specifics and smaller concepts.
I like the last half of the second-to-last stanza, and the first half of the last stanza- I think that narrows the focus more, and I think you can get more from it.
The rest seems to be all over the place- I know that's how it's kind of supposed to be, but I don't think it really works well.