this story is just beautiful. the emotions are so strong and clear, I love these two charecters! You have talent :)

your desription was beautifully done, I could clearly picture the scenes, and I love the way you write how they interact. This whole story was absuloutly believable, and the ending was so touching and well done. Great job

[a single tear escaped and slid down her cheek] Eew, so cliche. I know you can do a lot better than that.

Nice ending. A tad too sappy for my tastes, but it was still realistic and maintained both of their personalities, so I have to say it was a good way to end it.

As a whole, the description in this was very good. It wasn't the most descriptive piece I've ever read, but that was good in a way because it wasn't overbearing and focused more on the dialgue. The desctiption that you did use was very thorough and described the scene well.

So, overall, nice piece. A good read and I'm glad I came across it :)

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Hm, interesting. I normally don't like romance stories, but the fact that this isn't all happygo-lucky-everything's-perfect kept me interested. It was a lot more realistic and had more depth to it.

I like both of your characters. This is a pretty short piece, but I can get a good feel for both of them. Em (Emma? Emily?) is a likable girl even though she's hurting Sable. And Sable...well, he's your typical clueless guy. Gotta feel some pity for him even though I can see Em's perspective, too.

The fact that I've read a full chapter of a romance story is shocking enough for me, but even more surprising is that I actually want to read on. Kudos!

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Great job! I liked the first part better.

Oh, I love the sweet smell of closure :D

thanks for the update!

Nice, finally a happy ending! I'm glad for Emily and Sable they're together anyway. Well done!

oh yes... there just has to be more...dont be evil and leave us hanging...

More!

Omg you have to make this a two shot or I'll just be so sad! How depressing :( Gosh he's stupid. Ah well.

Uggh Sad ending, but good! [:

Hey there. Loved the story :D

I would LOVE to read a second chapter

That's heartbreaking, but it's a really good one-shot and well-written. Please make this a two-shot!