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DianaSweetie 2009-10-27 . chapter 1
Aw totally cute!
I love how she's so stubborn but Jeremiah still "loves" her it's great!
fairies and snapple 2009-09-19 . chapter 1
Oh, I liked the last line! Funny. And I also just like that a girl is captain of the boy's soccer team. Though, in all fairness, one of my guy friends was captain of the girl's team at his school. Or manager, or something. Anyway, very sweet. Nice.
Love Yours Truly 2009-05-20 . chapter 1
That was cute but I'm just wondering how Liv suddenly loved Jeremiah? Just a couple minutes before she was avoiding him but then she loves him? I don't know, I guess if it were me I would have made the characters say that they really really really liked each other or how they could love each other in the near future, just not now. Despite that, it had the 'aw' factor that you need in a one-shot. Nice work.
Lily Llynn 2009-05-12 . chapter 1
I believe you missed a t here: "but hat’s just the way it is, Liv." Incredibly cliche, and nobody would ask someone to prom 5 days before (that's ridiculous.), just realistically. Cute, though, but a little too happily-ever-after for me. Still, I'm glad woodstock1969 added this to our c2.
Kat 2009-05-12 . chapter 1
a nice light read (:
Camelia Sinensis 2009-05-07 . chapter 1
Uhm, I must say this was extremely cliché. God, there have been so many oneshots written about arrogance just in this site. And that's actually your title!
There's another thing I have to point out, which is that there's absolutely no explanation to why Liv suddenly realized she loved Jeremiah. Or even why he likes her.
Yeah, it's sweet & fluffy ( and there are loads of stories like this on this site), but there's so much lacking here, in my opinion. For starters, good characters & explanations.
x3life 2009-05-06 . chapter 1
aw this was so cute =)
Xonelel 2009-05-06 . chapter 1
“'Why? Am I distracting you again?'”

"She glanced back at him curiously, and saw that he was checking out some skanky freshman across the room."

"Liv had been avoiding Jeremiah ever since the “incident”. The past four days had been tough; hiding behind corners and getting to class late on purpose to avoid confrontation."

Haha I can see my horrible romantic situations inspire not just my own writing! :P

but anyway, this was really cute. Liv's SO in denial. But characters like that are fun so props for making it believable, albeit a little cliche. :)

It was a good length too. ended at just the right spot.

NOW write a prom chapter!
Anonymous 2009-05-06 . chapter 1
Aw...that was a short and sweet one-shot. Loved it.
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