It was a solid start, but I think you should watch how many times you use Avra's name, because you used it a lot - switch things up a bit. Also, use more specific words than "somethings" or whatever - try "figures" or something like that instead.

-Steph

Hey Laura,
Well I think your story is really good, I like the plot and how you slowly discover a little more all along the way.
I do think though, that is would help if you added a little more details. Sometimes I struggled to understand what was going on and had to read certain spots a couple of times to figure out what was happening. Also there were times I couldn't tell if it was the next day, week, or hour. So some more information and details in those areas would be helpful.
I think your characters are good and well rounded, and are believable. Plus they are not all the same and each is a little different.
I think your doing well in not giving to much info about your secondary characters. It is good to keep them, a bit more shallow then your major characters.
Over all I think it is really good. I can't wait to read and find out how it ends. Keep it up, you could become a great writer one day!

Oh! quite the start. A terrible scene, terrible to the characters I mean, not the readers. It's earned it's T rating. Someone so filled with reckless hate is rather disquieting. I'm guessing the story will be mostly about the princess.

One thing I thought could be better

"and headed off towards the King’s study"

in this sentence, to have a more descriptive verb than "headed". Something that would describe the way he headed.

Anyhoo I'm not sure when I'll read the rest but I'll try to. I'm rather curious to see what becomes of the little princess.

This should be interesting. I'd like to see more^^