how the hell did it get from tal to rain?
but anyways
im so confused on rain..
something with a bro and a evil genius that kills him? .__.

and i want coed dorms (:

Yeah, I agree with the narrator 100% that all assassins are murderers. ;)

I like it, but I feel that sometimes certain words you use cause the story to sound out of character (out of tone?) or just make the sentence sound funky.

You aren't using adverbs though, which is good.

The writing is quite good, but I don't really see a plot emerging, or any elements of romance/crime.

Woo hoo! New chapter. : ) Thanks for posting!!

~Rose

Interesting. You asked me not to point out grammar and punctuation, so I won't. There weren't that many, though. I likd the pace of it, very melancholy and contemplating. Draws you in. The descriptions are nice and detailed without being overdone, boring, and wordy, yay!

ID

Very beautiful!

I liked it...it's really creepy and interesting.

WHERE COULD THIS GO?! LOL. Although, really, I would like to see how this story develops. :)