Those first four lines were awesome, you really knew how to seperate those lines perfectly. That was very very good. The rest wasn't as good, but still you did a great job with the whole thing. Congrats, and keep writing!
-Jacob

Haha
Rainbows
To reflect your inner self
You gay ^^

I wish we did all live in a world of rainbows. Nicely put. Liked it a lot.

Poetic mist...stunningly descrpitive and emtive - this is simply sublime. Well done :D
~Ben