 Twilight424 2009-05-16 . chapter 1I really liked this story. It's good, but I didn't get it at some points. You should give out some more information about Sylvia's parents, the war, and use some better transitions when you skip ahead in time. Otherwise, it's the making of a great story.
And thanks for reviewing my story. I should be updating it shortly and removing the glitch that put my first chapter on twice. See ya! |