This is ridiculously happy. I wish I knew South Pacific so I would know what song you're talking about, but this is highly cute (not sure how theater buffs would respond to the alterations, though). Still, I really liked this and I'm very glad xoxluurve added this to our c2. (:

aw the sweetest story ever. it made me ridiculously happy too. did you win?

aw whats a cute one-shot =)

That was incredibly cute! Good job.
-AG :)

aw, i'm glad bringmayflowers asked me to read this!
it was so adorable!
i love Jay; i love Honey.
i love this story!
and i listened to the song; really adds to the awesome. :)

-toffeecakesxox,

That would have been mortifying. Having that play and the song lol! Very good and amusing! I like-y!

lol this makes me happy too :D

More!!

:) This was really cute, good job!

I love it! South Pacific is one of my fave movies. (Thanks to my mom) Actually my favorite song there is Some Enchanted Evening but I also thought that Honey Bun was simply out of this world in hilarity. Nice work!

I love it :D

I admit it. The reason I clicked on this story was because of my love for the musical South Pacific. The book is pretty good too by the way.

Anyway... onto reviewing this story.

I thought it was adorable that the girl's name was Honey. Super cute! I also thought it was really interesting that you told the story from a male perspective, which is something not a lot of writers in the Romance section do. I was very impressed.

Okay, I know it's hard to do this in a one-shot because, yes, I have had this issue too but you should try to work on description. The way you do so in this story is not as flowing as it could be. Thats something you can work on if you ever want to revise this piece.

Very cute overall and while it didn't make me ''ridiculously happy,'' it did make me smile. :-)

Good job.

that was cute ;]

This story makes me Ridiculously Happy too!!

Nice work, and good luck!