At first glance this seems like a simple poem but you’ve created some very strong imagery. I particularly liked the line “Whistles of the wind,” the alliteration is very effective; you can almost hear the sound as you say it.

Another particularly strong image is the line “Ate the moon and vanished,” the words are quite relentless and unforgiving; it’s like nature’s come alive.

Overall I think this is a good effort, but there’s also something about it that seems a bit childish in its approach.

Leila

Wow~ great poem
you improved well
I could imagine the event
Great job