 Fury of Heaven 2009-05-13 . chapter 1Hey, thanks for the review, appreciated as always. ^^
A few things to address, I agree completely with the shortness of the Syntian fight, but as you probably saw I took a writing hiatus and I'm having a little trouble keeping my fight scenes unique and interesting, so I decided to cut it short to get the rest of the chapter out for everyone keeping up; hoping to go back and flesh it out later.
Secondly, I've made a few slight changes to some minor events that you might pick up on next chapter, namely with regards to the slaves in the Empyrean encampment. It's a very minor issue, but I've decided that Zephyr didn't free them when he returned to the Academy, to give me a bit more to work with in the upcoming chapter. Very minor, but for all the plothole nuts out there I just thought I'd let you know I'm aware of it, and will be fixing it soon.
Finally, the warrior in armour will be revealed soon. I haven't decided how soon yet, but it could be anywhere within the next few chapters to a bit further on. It'll become a little more clear once I've sorted out where I'm going with the plot(for those of you who've been keeping a very detailed eye on the story you might have a few ideas, especially surrounding another character who's a little more obvious). |