Very understandable poem short and to the point, I think i just found a new favorite Author. Please keep writting

Very nice. I think that you did an excellent job of expressing the feeling of breaking and your ability to stick to your rhyme scheme and meter made it even better.

Again, nice work with this.

Very dark, if emotional. There's a potential for rhythm, but the second stanza's last line disrupts the rhyming scheme you had going. Still,this poem does describe the feeling of breaking pretty well.