|Reviews for Beautiful|
| Tewr 7/30/09 . chapter 1
I don't want my review to sound cliche or anything, but this poem was beautiful. It was simple, yet it spoke to me.
Your last few lines were especially powerful; "make me believe." It's as if the speaker, is giving herself up completely by finally letting walls down and letting someone else tell her that yes, she is beautiful, and she can't convince herself otherwise anymore. Because she's there in her lover's arms, b and there are no walls, no lies, no imaginations, just truth. Truth and beauty.
Beauty is truth, truth beauty. This poem proves that statement by the famous poet.
It also reminds me of Jordin Spark's song "God Loves Ugly."
You did a wonderful job at capturing the insecurity of several women, while making the piece extremely personal and of the author. That is what poetry should do.
| FirstBloom13 5/21/09 . chapter 1
gutentag, it's sakura here from the review game.
first of all, the concept was very good, and the specific-ness of the topic really helped the work stay focussed. the second half of the poem was definitely better than the first- more melodic, better rhythmically, better repetition. the theme of having someone else help you gain confidence was very refreshing; you're constantly hearing about feeling good about yourself on your own, and it's become too cliche. great topic choice.
the beginning was alright, but definitely not as good as the ending bit. some of the lines looked like a regular sentence just cut off in the middle. there were also some small grammatical/spelling errors; in a story I wouldn't bother mentioning it but in poetry, you're working with a much smaller word count and you have to do the best you absolutely can. "I cute my arms-" should be I cut my arms. "I tried those to be" didn't really make sense. just try to make sure your mindset is on writing specifically poetry, and not just a artistically altered paragraph.