the poem is nice...
although this line kinda confuse me
"I’m not going to who I am now"
I think you meant that you don't want the present life now because he's not with you... *ehem*

Nice poem...
It seems you keep writing love poems and stories...
Is there someone who inspired you to do these poems and stories? xD

It's nice...
I could feel the love in the poem
but there's one things that seems not right
"and will not part."
I think it should be apart?
It must be a mistake from typing
but, hey, the poem is really nice
keep it up (^_^)

"just look at me"...

wow, man, you got me in there. It was something as if you were rephrasing his wish of love. Nyaao, it was totally captivating.




-LittleLoser-

Wow~ I was impressed again
Great poem
I cold feel the coldness or sadness in the poem
Great job
keep it up (^_^)

Interesting notion but there is one thing. "visibly see" is somehow saying the same thing twice in a row, it throws the reader a little off while reading.

- Yuki

I liked it. The imagery in the first stanza is totally awesome. The tenses were a bit shaky though, and it made some parts awkward. Good job though. ^__^

Ouch... But, I wonder why they can't be "together"?
Nice poem

It's nice..
It shows how much the person love him/her
And I like the 3 last line

The poem is nice, you express the love well
(^_^)

I nice and depending piece, suitable for a romance.

- Yuki

It's nice
I like the way how you resemblance love to ocean (^_^)

I like that you said that unconditional love is fresh because most people think of it as old and necesarry. You put a new spin on it.
This is a sweet and cute poem because you seem to have true emotion in it despite being simple inspired by a song.
Good job.

I like the concept very much, but the piece seems unfinished. It's very abrupt when to me, the subject calls for a more flowing style. I really like the first four lines as they are, but would drop "very well" at the end of the fifth. That is the point at which the tone changes. With the mentioning of 'sea scent' you made such strong imagery for me! It may not be as strong for some, but in my mind it was almost overwhelming. Overall, very nice work, but I would also like to see a period after 'Beach.'

The poem is nice...
simple yet nice (^_^)
Is this for goth? joke...

what's...goth?