I think it's very complex and beautiful...It took me two read-thoughs to understand, which in this case is a good thing. (I basically got it the first time, but I felt like there was probably more to it, so I read it again and I felt like I understood it better.) The rhythm was lovely as well.
My only suggestion is to take out the 'but less beautiful' in the first stanza, because it kind of distracts from the point/unnecessary information/interrupts flow, that kind of thing.