Woah! Great first chapter. Really intense and had me hooked throughout. THe descriptions are the best part of this; it makes it seem more realistic and you've done an excellent job keeping the suspense up throughout :)

x mandy

YAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAY!

Quick write some more... I miss it still! :)

God bless.

A CLIFFHANGER!

Quick, write quickly! IT'S A CLIFFHANGER! :(

You're a good writer. God bless. ;D

O_O wow. this seems intense. i love it.

- Key