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tonight we bloom 2009-08-06 . chapter 1
Probably my favorite of yours... so far.

The second stanza was perfection. You have amazing imagery in your poems.

And the second to last stanza was just... amazing. Mentioning that you were born in the ocean sounds just so beautiful.
jessica kelli. 2009-06-15 . chapter 1
honestly, it's not my favorite of your work.
but nonetheless it's still beautiful.
Isca 2009-05-21 . chapter 1
I like that you used 'north' as the direction to follow when you're lost--it reminded me those who use the stars to guide them home.

Aww, the ending is beautiful. I hope you're able to visit the ocean many times in your life. :)
Ashelin 2009-05-18 . chapter 1
I thought this was sweet. I gain great pleasure from the ocean myself. I thought the end of the second line should have been a colon, not a semicolon, but perhaps that is just me...I really enjoyed this, especially the last three stanzas (most of the poem then!). Your imagery in the second stanza, your personalness in the third, and the conclusive beautiful quility of the last. Great job.
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