 Ashelin 2009-05-18 . chapter 1I thought this was sweet. I gain great pleasure from the ocean myself. I thought the end of the second line should have been a colon, not a semicolon, but perhaps that is just me...I really enjoyed this, especially the last three stanzas (most of the poem then!). Your imagery in the second stanza, your personalness in the third, and the conclusive beautiful quility of the last. Great job. |