great first chapter, action filled and sets the time and place well.
i noticed a couple of small errors...
second alas should have full stop and not comma. especially if you're starting the next line with a capital.
"thankfully letting know waste of theirs..." know should be no.
"petty coats" shoudl be "petticoats"
and "so that i may have a chance to raise pained.." i think you mean "rise"
look forward to reading more!!

a very good interesting chapter. i think though that since she killed the captain she should of some sort of regret even if it is just minimal. Great job!!

flame = extremely harsh review.

this was brilliant. i just kept reading it over and over (the song). it's amazing.

~Ana

descriptive, visual, moving... very nice.

~Ana

Nice. I loved the imagery especially; "-like a lump of hog's droppings-" it was great.


~Ana

Wonderful chapter, the detail is lovely, absolutely. Poor Thea, she sounds so lonely on that ship. I hope better things are to come for her.

:)

what an interesting chapter! lol! good job

I don't have time to read this right now, but I have to point out that in your summary, the translation of The Beautiful Ruthless Boy in French would be something like this (not what you came up with initially): Le Beau Garcon Sans Merci. Or: Le Beau Garcon Impitoyable. It would sound much better if it were grammatically correct :P

wow i really liked this chapter.it had a lot of action and details. do you write the songs?? good job

Cool chapter! :o)
Keep updating!
-BeachVamp ;p

This is such an interesting story, very different indeed.

Francine is quite the character, and the people she meets along the way, as they talk to her, we learn abit more about Francine.

Mystery, fear, anger, all captured well. Nicely done.

:)

very good. a bit confusing but i got it at the end. you should put a summary of what had happened with the person the chapters before, because i had forgotten who fancine was and i didnt get where she was at. good job though. Update

i likey. its getting very good. keep it up!

That abbess is a jerk!
Good chapter! :o)
Keep updating!
-BeachVamp ;p

interesting, though you should of had the scene 2 and 3 be the same scene, it would of fit better with the pattern. good job