whoa, weird everything happened so fast

Ha, good chapter. I liked your descriptions of people in this one, especially how you described Varius, the skin 'fleshed' out by a 'warm tan' that was great. Ah well good work, your writing dosen't sound like you're 16 at all!

Love it, it draws you in. Well done, I'm very curious about "Violet" as well as the young man who ran over her, he's strange as well. Please update as soon as you can.

Hey, I really liked this. I found it refreshing and I liked how it wasn't heavy with too much description. My favourite part was the end, the last few paragraphs, I thought you did that very well. Simple, but interesting.