I had to whisper it. But I think that it sounded awesome anyway xD
The first sentence was hard to read, because apart from the comma near the start, there was nothing to break up the sentence.
I love the words. I loved the way they twisted themselves to make more sense than they would have otherwise.

A wonderful Poem, it is very touching with some wonderful imagery. especill "when i can say i have lived, i can say I have lived" i liked this line alot