and this is exactly what's going on with me right now. right down to the parts about hell and the part about the song the narrorator wants the subject to replay over and over.

which honestly, is a bit terrifying, but mostly it's interesting.

feeling like you picked through my brain to write this piece aside, it really was beautiful/stunning/incredible. keep it up. :]

peace,
red.

I have the sneaking suspicion that you are Big Brother spying on me.

But who, would admit to that, to this?

Wow. That is incredible. I love the angst of it, and the darkness, "she wants to be the reason you go to hell." Amazing work, for sure. Keep writing! :)

that was absolutely,
run-away-train, death spiral,
madness. So frantic and stunning
that it made me read faster, and faster,
until it all crashed on the
last line. A-Oh

powerful. i love it.

i found the intro a bit startling at first, a bit strange, but then it sucked me in quickly before i could scream for help. well done.