that was beautiful, very moving and well written. :)

Short, but it says a lot. You've put up quite a big story with only a handful of words, well done!

Nice piece. Short, but it says what it needs to say.

I like the single word lines in the middle. They create an interesting rhythm that reminds me of rain falling.

I also loved the last line. It's an interesting concept, and a good thought to leave your readers on.

The only concrit I'd give on this is the random capitolization. I'd normally expect it to be used to make certain words stand out, but I can't see the significance in "will" and "the."

Great piece overall :)

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