Beautiful story! Love it! :)

This was amazing!

This is a really cute story. I quite enjoyed it. It was one of those nice, light reads that make you smile. However, the typos were numerous which subtracts from the whole feel. Do remember to give it a once over and edit.

If you don't mind me asking, how old are you?

This was the cutest story ever. Aside from some typos, it was very well written and the plot was outstanding. Great job!

That. Was. Amazing.

this is really cool,

i enjoyed reading this very much :D

well done to you :D

Hmmmm interesting... Not bad, but lots of typos... :) good work

Best story I have ever read on here. I could hardly go to bed last night I was so entranced with it. Good work :)

Love the story amazing but the ending was kinda sad in a happish way. :P

The story is adorable, but it has A LOT of typos. Some are probably unintentional, however the word "does" is spelled "dose" throughout the entire story. I would suggest getting someone to proofread before you post. But as I said before, the story is adorable and I enjoyed it very much )

very good story. I loved it. Yamal and Shadow were my favorite, but Greg and Fellise were pretty cool too. Besides the spelling errors and a few grammer mistakes, it was pretty good. Like you said, nothing a bit of editing couldn't fix.

that was a great ending, I am quiet happy and satisfied with finding this story!

That was a beautiful ending. You are a very talented writer keep it up. I'll be waiting for the story you put.

That was one of the most amazing stories i have ever read it was so awesome! I just loved it! i cant even describe you ...you are an excellent writer the God has certainly blessed you with a wondeful talent

Great chapter, sad to hear that there's only one chapter to go but happy. Update soon please!