This is an awesome story! i will read more!

I love love love love love it! I can't wait to read the sequel!

Hey,
I just finished reading your story and I really liked it! It was one of the best stories I have read on this site...But,I am left wondering about how the four stones were created and how the orb was created...Is there any chance you would do prequel/sequel to this talking about the creation of the stones and the orb of light? I just found those questions glaring at me at the end of the story...Also, who sent the dreams to the kids? If you ever thought of sending this in for publishing (which I would recommend) I would make sure that those questions were answered or at least made to show that you realize they are unanswered and plan to answer them later...

That can't be the end!
They have to decide who to pick for their succeedors... They have to get married... they have to accomodate the castle to their desire...

Come ON!

There must be a sequel coming or something!!

~Mo~

Kewl.

BUT! BUT!

THE AIR KINGDOM! D:
WHAT'S HAPPENING TO HILARY?!?!

More! More! More! :D

I wanted Hilary to go, though XD

this is really awesome...you did a great job..i can't wait for the next chapter..

OH MY GOSH, PILLOW, YOU PUT IN HILARAY, I THINK I LOVE YOU

Oh boy..

But, Hilary is right... They are going where they need to go.

i just wonder why the Shadow warriors are allowed in the Light Castle...?

PLEASE UPDATE [A]{s}[A]{p}

~Mo~

Erin betrayed them! Der... Even I know that!

:D

~Mo~

Aw! it's a Kai squared moment! (hehe, they both have kai in their names... get it?)

~Mo~

So this story is off to a good start; I like the Shadow warriors in the Light Kingdom. Overall I think your plot could use a little beefing up.
For example, why didn't the light kingdom just leave the wall up instead of taking the key down, and if no one knows, why is no one curious that they took the wall down?
Also, how are all of the shadow warriors so incompetent in fighting if they're supposed to be the most fearsome fighters in all of the kingdoms? If Sinistra is the best warrior and she was taken down by Kai and Kaia both, why are the the kingdoms having so much trouble fighting off the shadows (given they are less talented than their opponents)? Why did Kaia's friends restrain her from killing Sinistra? Kai is the one that got egged on and attacked her in the first place.
How did Ray not sense Erin in the first place? How did Erin, if he's such an oaf, not get caught beforehand?
Why has everyone accepted the presence of Shadow warriors in the Light Kingdom so well (no one has really gotten upset about it or thought maybe going on wasn't a good idea because the whole thing could be a trap, etc)? Especially Kai, who's skeptical to begin with?
How come Kaia's injuries heal so quickly? She gets nailed in the side by a dude with a sword, then immediately after starts climbing through windows like a pro. She also has all of her injuries from being captured. Again with the incompetency of the shadow warriors - no one is watching her, though they know that she has friends nearby? If they're as deadly as Kai thinks they are, how come they have only bruised her, not something more permanent that would prevent her from running away (hamstring her, break various bones, etc)?

So like I said before, this story definitely has potential. Please don't take this the wrong way, as I do tend to come off a little harsh in my reviews, but you do need to develop your plot and your characters a little more.

I concur with the previous reviews that you should make the changes in time at the beginning of the story a little more clear; not just telling the * means time has passed, but actually incorporating it into the story

Yay for good grammar :)

Keep it up :)

Heya Syn, you sdaid it was my choice so i read it! Excellent book, can't wiat for the next update.

...Erin's a idiot lol

Hmm...
One warrior?
The best warrior is so powerful that without them, the whole kingdom would fall?
That seems a little extreme.

I also think that you could write this whole chapter as an omnipresent narrator, because you're not actually using the characters' POVs i.e. you're in 3rd person the whole time. You could probably just give more background information on the whole room and incorporate all of the different parts into one overarching point of view so it would flow better.

I see that you already have some good people reviewing your story, so I'll be brief:
In the prologue (title spelled wrong btws, but I would have never known except the spell checker just underlined it when I wrote it here), you change tenses from past to present, which is awkward i.e. the first paragraph is in the past, but the third paragraph is mostly in the present, though they are describing the same time period.