that. is. good. i like...imagined it. -shudder-

Wow, i love this one. A lot of feeling and power in those words. And nicely constructed...i could almost see it.

Dark, but I really liked this. I found it interesting how you refered to death as home. Good work.

Wow. This poem flows really well-it's smooth, yet chilling. The tone of the line, "She smiles," is particularly amazing-suggesting that the pain and approach of death brings joy to the speaker; she finds peace and a release. It's rather sad, though, that the world became so cruel and painful that there was no joy left to comfort the speaker.

Wow, this was so good. It was graphic, but not in a bad way, because I didn't finish the poem feeling bad for the girl. I felt happy that she was where she wanted to be.

My favorite part: "A pool of cerise liquid: Growing deeper by the minute" It was so vivid. Hehe. Keep it up! :)