|Reviews for Abomination|
| biblioholic 4/4/10 . chapter 20
On a personal opinion sort of note... Aww... I was looking forward to mega-wolf... but nope... you had to make mega-vamp...
On a more serious note...
The only problem I have with it is that it's not a full length novel. That is literally the only way that it could be better in my eyes.
What shall I say about the plot? The story? The foreshadowing? The characters? And the inconsequential grammer?
Same thing again. In order: Great. Awesome. Fabulous. Wonderful. No flaws I saw.
| biblioholic 3/31/10 . chapter 8
Wow. Nice. I started on the first one and I just blew through the rest. I loved it! Hands down the best story(s) I've seen on this sight so far.
(mines not done yet so that doesn't count :P)
Truthfully I am not a very big fan of the Vampire/Werewolf thing going around. I came e-surfing around looking for some good stories and landed on Crossblood. By the third chapter I smelled a vampire flick. But I found that it was interesting me too much to not be sure. Couldn't stop reading it. And by the time I reached Chapter 9 I was loving it! I got to the end of Crossblood and jumped on Abomination. Loved that so far too! Congratulations, you successfully trapped a vampire hater in your story net. Cannot. Wait. For more! Please! MORE!
(crowd chanting more! more! more! Wild applause! and a laugh from me.)
O.k. now time for the serious analysis. Everyone likes some good feedback eh? I know I would (hint hint XD)
There was a slight problem, easily fixable, with the paragraph separation. Someone talking at the beginning of the paragraph, and someone else talking at the end. Uh oh. That's fine though. It's a four/five minute fix. And it's just a technicality.
Sorry. Can't find anything else wrong. Looked over both stories for like a half an hour. I really cannot say anything that can be said to be wrong about it after that one technicality...
Good foreshadowing, great plot, emotion is tangible. Excellent action, good spacing of said action. What pulled me in were the characters. Great characters. You can't help but care for them. Naive as they are, you can't help.
The rest of the grammatical stuff is good. Paragraph separation almost all good, comma placement good, capitalization good. (I've seen stories with capitalization like it was written by a second grader on this unorganized site, but this is most definitely NOT one of em!)
Great story. Loved it (- yes that ever present refrain -) Can't wait for more! (