This piece is really really good. I've never read a one-shot and you've opened my eyes.. Keep writting. Off seeing if u have other stories. haha

That was great! I really loved the characters, the mood, the meaning in the story. I was racing to the end as soon as Victoria began to tell the story, and the ending took me completely by surprise and yet made so much sense. It left me breathless, but with my brain going a mile a minute after I finished. And that is always a great sign.

You have a good grasp of show, not tell, too. I'm amazed you pulled it off with a first person voice. It's pitch-perfect. The 1st person adds to the immediate "story within a story" effect, but you stayed within the frames of the character wonderfully, even while you set up a creepy poignant mood. I loved the voice.

It's a very very nice short story. There were a few grammatical mistakes. Nothing major. Some punctuation errors mostly. The main problem was here: "the music would be the same. Yet his old theories proved to be correct". Shouldn't it be incorrect? That actually changes the meaning.

This was amazing. I loved your characters, they were filled out and had quirks such as the "Dairy Goddess" smile. The story Victoria said was well embedded and the lightning/thunder interrupting really gave into the mood of the entire story. I could really hear the characters talking, everything happening, even until the very end with Eric without his shadow. The small little details you put in such as Victoria's issues with her sister just made the story even better. Really loved the idea of it all, keep it up! :)

Oh wow! This was fantastic! From the first line to the last it held my attention. It was so effortless to read, although I’m sure it wasn’t easy to write. Your characters seemed so well developed and you displayed them very well. I feel as though I now know them just as I would an actual person. And your plot was done wonderfully! I was almost afraid that you wouldn’t have been able to pull off telling two stories simultaneously, but you were sure to have enough descriptive details for both between the rain and the composer’s actions with his shadow. You did however have some grammatical mistakes, but a good read through should catch them. This was a wonderful piece and I’m adding it to my Favorites List. Amazing job and happy writing!