|Reviews for Forgotten|
| tonight we bloom 9/7/09 . chapter 1
| Isca 8/16/09 . chapter 1
"And when you push me, I pray you catch me as the sundown disappears." I think it's the word "sundown" that makes this line so striking.
"Nightmares and train fares." Nice rhyming. Stunning pairing: fear and monotony.
| in theory 8/16/09 . chapter 1
You have such an ease in your words, a strong sense of purpose in the storytelling but still wrapped in enough beautiful metaphor.
Thanks for your kind review :)
| Keree 8/7/09 . chapter 1
That poem really gets to me... like I've experinced something so much like it... but I don't know...
| Orange Oxymoron 7/28/09 . chapter 1
It's moving imagery, but it's not too strong. Excellent.
| Lunar Skylark 7/28/09 . chapter 1
Amazing. I liked the raw emotion that came out of the words. Every time I re-read it, I got different bits and pieces of the story that I didn't process before. Great poem.
| StarlightWish17 7/22/09 . chapter 1
Wow! That's all I can say. WOW! :D
I would quote you but I would pretty much be quoting the entire poem.
WOW! Lol! xD
| the-ever-changing-name 7/6/09 . chapter 1
great job! this was very well done!
| irish-ileana 7/1/09 . chapter 1
This is really intense. I love the florescent phantom, that "No one forgets how to breathe."
| TheOneYouSearchFor 6/2/09 . chapter 1
This poem creates lovely images in my mind. In the beginning, you say that the memories "flood the sky," and the image I got was the light of the sun "flooding" the sky. So the ending where the "sundown disappears" is a fulfilling and satisfying conclusion.
I especially like the parallelism in the lines "No one forgets how to breathe" and "Do you remember how to breathe?"
| Little girl Big world 5/26/09 . chapter 1
Absolutely amazing! The imagery you used in this had pictures painted in my mind and I could feel what the main character feels. I loved the lines, "Do you remember how to breathe?
Your lips bleed the oxygen I need." and
"and when you push me-
I pray you catch me
as the sundown disappears."
Just wonderfully written. Enjoyable to read. :)
Adding to my Favorites