AMAZING.
I used my brain.

-Whatsherface

Oh man! The title caught my eye, and the poem really delivered. Really liked the end.

I remember hearing one like this at my year 8 camp. It was a horrible camp, but the story thing was funny. I love yours, of course.

I love all of the completely contray statements. I read it aloud as recomended and I was laughing so hard I could barely understand what I was saying at the end of the poem, and tears were pouring out of my eyes. Brilliant writing!

haha this is great, certainly unique and really interesting and works well outloud, as you requested! good job :)