Alliee!
This is Cherry, just got back and read this story and OMG it's SO cutee!
Cher and Gio are adorable and have super cool names!
Great job hun!
xoxo

haha this so cute and sweet!
loved it.
Wasn't expecting them to be together, but it just makes it all that much more cute and entertaing. Realistic even.

13 from Indonesia, huh?! Cool beans. Well, this was fun to read. Gio and Cher sound like fun kids. :)

There are some spelling and grammar mistakes in here, but they've been pointed out. I will mention that we don't usually say "I'm ogling at you," rather, it's "I'm ogling you." Does that makes sense?

I'm sending you a PM with some more suggestions.

Poignant, entertaining, and funny :)
I liked it a lot. So cute :3

lol, i love it!! love the boast too, it works!! ill check out more.. out of school that is, lol! *hides window from teacher* lol :D

Wow. Nice. I wasn't expecting them to be together, so I did sigh when I started reading this. A normal cliche... but no! Right then, in the middle, you surprised us ALL! I actually scrolled back up and read it again. I was like, 'Aw... cute.' I want my relationship with my future boyfriends to be like THAT. Nice. :)

Personally, excessive bolding + italicizing bothers me, but this was cute. But I think you would've been better sticking to just dialogue (even though we don't get some of the details like his chuckling and her blinking, but either dialogue-only or more description sprinkled throughout).
I did really like this, though, and I'm very glad xoxluurve added this to our c2. (:

Very short! And yeah, thought they weren't going out with to start :p Nonetheless, it'd be a much fun couple to watch!
Not that I do that. Watch couples, I mean.
o.o
I mean. Cute story. I'm normal!

I really like your one-shot, but I picked up a couple of mistakes you might want to fix.

Sentence: “’Cause you ogle instead of staring to your girlfriend?” ^it should be
at, not to

Sentence: "I never knew straight guys knows what PDA stands for." ^knew ^stood
You started the sentece in past tense, so you have to keep consistent throughout.

I hope you don't think I'm bashing your work or anything, I'm just trying to give some helpful advice.

Keep up the work!!

aw this was really cute =)

Well, that was mainly dialogue, and it flowed really, really well. Very cute!
-AG :)

I loved this
I eman at first I thought Cher hated Gio with the things she kept saying to him
it seemed like those clichés were the guy is a popular and arrogant prick who likes to bug a girl who hates his guts
so I was quite schocked when you wrote that Cher was actually Gios girlfriend
But I think their relationship is so cute and funny because of the way they act around each other

Aw, that was cute! I loved it! You're a really good writer! :)

This confused me a bit.

Were they going out all the way through? Because I thought they wer friends until you went on about girlfriends... confusing.

Anyway, apart from that, it was nicely written. and cute. :)