Sweet. Poor guy, she really is quite stubborn. ;)

That's super cute. I like that you ended it with a hug. Those are the best! :)

Yay, a short! :-)

What kind of guy has big blue eyes and eyelashes a model would trade her thumbs for? A girl like me had to tote an ounce of mascara on each eye to make it look like she had any lashes at all. It was criminal. -- The funny thing is I think most guys like that HATE it! They think it's girly.

“You don’t have a fever,” he murmured. His freakish eyelashes tangled with mine. -- Wow, invading personal space much? LOL

The very real horror of death crackled at me in each flare of white and purple lightning that streaked across the night. -- M, loved that paragraph. Very vivid.

Would I sizzle like a corndog before I died? -- Haha. Now I want a corndog. :-P

One of the lightning bolts that could have skewered me had instead blown a crater through the back of the box. -- Whops! That sucks.

“You’re looking at a couple to three hundred dollars in replacement parts.” Kalpesh grimaced. -- Not to mention if it's at all old, it wouldn't be worth it. Time for a new computer! :-D

For some reason, Tommy caught my eye. -- He's thinking "Ka-ching! Jackpot!" Hahahah.

I like the ongoing Shary/cherie joke.

It was like the prince offering Sleeping Beauty a No-Doz. Where’s the venti chai latte, slick? -- Mahaha, awesome.

Aw, cute ending! I liked it. :-) Very well written and descriptive, as your stuff usually is. Hopefully you'll get moving on one of your other things soon! *gentle nudge* ;-)

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Ok, so all in all it was a sweet little piece of fiction. I definitely liked Tommy's little nickname for Shary and he seemed like such a sweet character! But then I totally understand Shary's independent type of personality and the unwillingness to give that power over to someone else so easily.

It was cute, light-hearted and it didn't just focus around the romance, which I find to be too predictable sometimes. I'm glad you didn't end on that note that some people do, rushing into the romance at the end and sealing it with a kiss.

I just read a part of your profile and you say you're an impulse writer, which I understand. Sometimes I get in that eh kinda mood where trying to write is literally impossible unless I really push myself to. But hopefully you write some more pieces like this!

xoxo