|Reviews for Model|
| Vancelle 7/24/09 . chapter 1
Hm. I'm not sure about this one. I think it's too short Even though I get an idea of what you're talking about, I think it'd be better if you elaborate. If you're going for bluntness, you could make it longer and still make it feel blunt by the word choice.
Steer clear.' - I like those lines. They say a lot without being too wordy.
| RawrEllieMayMightBeADinosaur 7/23/09 . chapter 1
I love how blunt this is. It's just straight to the point, no bullshit, you know?
the first line was a little awkward, 'a model distinct', doesn't make much sense to me. however, i could just be missing something.
nice job :)
| Said Author 6/4/09 . chapter 1
Ooh, I really liked this! Loved the structure of it because it shows the clear-cut thoughts-it's direct to the point but the flow is still smooth. I didn't really dislike anything... But I also liked the way you organized the lines. It starts with "model", goes with "her", a point, then more on "her" (she), and then back to model. I think that way it brings more of a story to it.
Awesome job! :}