hello! this is a very interesting piece with a some potential, nicely done. keep it up.

-dp
also, care to read and review some of my own works? i'd love the support...

:0 spectacular. unbelievable.

random sidenote: "singeing" is such a cool word.
seriously. it look so unusual.

onto the real review:
mymy, you can write. and your so fluent and poetic, it's lovely.
the dose of angst and tragedy is just enough to lure the reader in,
but not overwhelm them too much.
your imagery is great, as well.

I'm glad that I read this. I loved it! Parts of it gave me chills, which means it must've been good. The words fell in a nice pattern (for lack of better word), and this helped make reading of it more effective.

In short, I loved it, and keep up the good writing!

Wow. Your poem holds deep meaning, if not for others than for yourself. Telling the truth, poetry is kind of my less-honed edges, so i'm not sure how good a judge i am. But the choices of words you use creates a sort of flowing effect, so there isn't a discernable rhythm, but it's enticing despite that. The emotions evoked are powerful and therefore clearer to the reader, and despite the sadness, I really enjoyed this work. Keep it up.

Prometheus