Great story so far, a little slow but very Lord of the Rings inspired - definitely my type of adventure!

Unfortunately, I'm a little disappointed about the stereotypyes of the woman characters. I apologise greatly if any of this is incorrect, but so far Adrie, Anora, Fanny, Rhea and Callida are all young, dainty women who even rival models with their porcelain appearance and although they are intelligent, these traits are clearly shadowed by the male characters. Now, I know in Lord of the Rings there were hardly any female parts, but at least they were portayed as women who relied on themselves and didn't spend the entire time following the men around.

Something I'm just curious about. Do artifacts in your setting have unlimited power? Because I was wondering if there would be a limit to how many undead the Gralni’Mirte could animate at one time.

...which in turn was a rewrite of Germanic/Norse legends, something Tolkein openly admitted. He once said that The Hobbit included many themes taken directly from the epic of Beowulf.

Nice rewrite of Lord of the Rings... (sarcasm)...

Oh here it is. Was wondering how you would inject peace loving hippies into your medieval war story lol.

I'm enjoying this story a great deal... it's kinda brutal, and rather horrifying in places. I guess that means you've done a good job of creating your villains.

That last bit about the mating ritual turned my stomach, though... poor Anoraveldron.

One comment on the writing itself... every now and then you have a paragraph which reads kinda stiffly. "He did this. He did that. He did the other." For example, from this chapter: "The chieftain walked past to two burly goblins who stood guard outside the office. He crossed the front atrium to the Lord Protector’s office in the back. He rapped his knuckles on the closed oaken door."

Perhaps you could join the sentences a bit to make them flow more smoothly. E.g. "The chieftain walked past to two burly goblins who stood guard outside the office. Crossing the front atrium to the Lord Protector’s office in the back, he rapped his knuckles on the closed oaken door." Even an "and" instead of a new sentence would work.

LOL my boy Jarek pwned that dwarf!

Cool, kind of a sequel/revamp of your Lost Relic universe. Love the story, only thought that maybe having the goblin being able to eat meat when their dark elven ancestors could not would be better,since it would make them even more warped by black magic. All in all, keep up the good work.

Keep it up. Jarek is my fav so far

good so far haven't read much I'll read more later
Has potential to be a good tale
perhaps try to start a bit quicker to grab the reader's attention next time? plunge into an exciting situation and explain later, maybe.
But yes, this is great as it is.

I dont get tired of stories so fast, but I did of this one. You need to move faster & also you need to fix your habit of putting in too many little details.

Cool fic keep it up

Good start so far. I like the character interaction so far in this chapter.