|Reviews for Ode To Graduating|
| Danielle Gin 7/11/09 . chapter 1
This was a really nice piece! I like that you were able to handle both the negatives with the positives so well. Interchanging them periodically like you did really helped create a flow and kept my interest up. I also like how it was very realistic! Between acknowledging the slut and weed, puking in the bowl and nights spend studying - that's how high school life really is and I'm glad to see that you presented it in a way that both parents and teens would appreciate. Nice work!
| bipedalcooney 7/2/09 . chapter 1
Yes, we did do it! :D
I like the nostalgic tone of the poem, it's very well written. I, however, cannot quite relate to the typical high-school events about which you write- and that's my only complaint about this poem; that it's rather stereotypical. But then again, it's not necessarily a bad thing if that's what high school was like for someone. Like I said, it just wasn't this way for me. But that's just specific to me and doesn't necessarily have much to do with the quality of your writing. Overall, it's a good poem. Great work and keep writing!
| tiger002 7/1/09 . chapter 1
As a graduate of 2009, I can relate to the poem. Fun times overall.
| Isca 6/5/09 . chapter 1
"For growing up." It's funny that change is so hard on people. The 'slut' line was my favourite. Everyone needs her? Ahahaha. Priceless. :P
| Grains and Oats 6/4/09 . chapter 1
I'm probably making a bit of an ass of myself, but when I read this out loud it didn't have any rhythm or flow to it. It sounds more like a paragraph or a rant, just a few enters hit every now and then it make it look like a poem. The rhyming worked better in this one than others of yours I've read, but even so, it didn't make a rhythm.
"This is for the girls and the boys-
For the class we had-
The teachers we loved-
The teachers we hated-
For the classes we loved-
And the classes we ditched-
For the reports we passed-
For that class we failed-
For the straight A student,
The one loved and hated,
The one envied-"
This segment starts out sounding like it's talking about the students, but it sounds more like it's talking about the classes themselves. Maybe you could put the first line at the end of this? It would probably be an improvement.
Overall, it was okay, better than the others I've reviewed even without the flow. Keep writing.