That was really random. I'm not telling you to do this, because I hate when people tell ME to do this, but it would probably be better if you turned it into a full-length story. It just seems kind of rushed, and I didn't really get any sense of depth from the love that they have for each other. I think it's a really good idea, if not a little cliched, but it just seems shallow and hurried. I think that if you went into more detail about their texts, and showed things they had in common or things they liked about one another - or simply things John liked about Taylor - it would read much better. Also, the ending was a little eh, if you know what I mean. I mean, the last few lines were good, but showing their first meeting and his whole declaration of love just seemed a little... boring.

Eh, but I'm being picky. I wouldn't do this if I didn't think this had potential - so I guess I'm saying that if it sucked, I wouldn't even bother telling you to make it better. As it is, it's very good. I just think it could be very great. Sorry if that offends you, it's just what I think.

Good job on this.

- bbal

You should hae made it a story...it would have been really nice to read...i liked it although at the end it seemed a bit rushed...i love your humor and how sarcastic you potreyed johns day at the beggining but i thing you gave to much emphasis to the beginning that you rushed to write everything elseyou had in your mind..
nice story line, very clever :)

OH yeah! FLF I just remembered. Anyway great story you should make it an epic saga of high school drama. LOL love it.

I was reading this thinking uh, where is this going. And thn i saw Fadge's name and i was all like OMG! Coz i was just re-reading that fic like literally yesterday...I was so surprised!
So...John is bi...how interesting...

D-D- so cute!! D: