First off, great job! It kept me interested, and that's a huge plus. Furthermore, I could relate to what you’re talking about. You state why you hate him, then you give a reason, or an example-it makes it more personal, and things that sound personal are much more insightful. You’re figure of speech isn’t cliché either: “I hate the way you hug me. An icebox is warmer.” I absolutely love it!

Wow, pretty much a hate filled poem, huh? Anyway, I do like the way you used the words in a direct sense. It really heightened the feel of animosity in this work especially when we're talking about hate, direct words have much bigger impact than going around the corner. But I'm not too sure about the genre though. But then again, you're the author, so I guess things are up to you. ;)

P.S: Thanks very much for your review on The Eternal Grail. Pay back this review via a nice good review for the next chapter of the story. ;)

-From The Roadhouse. :)

Sounds kind of fmilar to what my friend feels about someone. very nice indeed. x

I love how this is almost stream of thought, but with significant breaks. It's very interesting in format! Much different from what I'm used to. I loved it all around! And I'm in complete agreement. Guys like this make me sick.

Oh goodness. Shall we be disposing of the body soon? Very expressive...I can picture them, even if I don't know who you're talking about!