hey safire that was really good as much as i got to read.. it makes me wanna read more and more keep writting... and keep the faith in urself..

Her father is an asshole...You should fix the errors in the story that I told you about and your chapters still need to be longer...I'm sorry but the short chapters are to short for me...well have a great day and keep writing! :P

Let me guess you don't like your father...I love the repel us with garlic part very funny...you know you should of put "we dont sparkle either I have know idea where the person wrote twilight got that idea"...that would be funny...all in all its a good story...you should make your chapters longer though...I'm just saying...I'm the type of girl who likes to read long chapters! :)

Lovely x