Oh wow, that was like a reality check. I love the summary--something realistic. Some places you really think you are completly safe, but it turns out that it is just as dangerous as everywhere else.

All in all, a great story, Wolfemoon! It was short but sweet. Short and sweet, hehe. :)

I have never really gone to a carnival, and barely any mazes. Your story really puts into perspective that really, even the most funnest (does that sound weird?) places can be dangerous. I love the ending, and it really tells of the outcome of that deadly/dangerous fire in one of the most happiest/funnest places that no one expects something bad happening.

Great job! Looking forward to reading more!

*Midnight-Wolfe*

I didn't even look for grammar as the story was great. you could have had grammar misstakes the story held my intrest to the end. Onething I want to know is who took care of the little girl while the father was in the hospital? I took it that she had a mother.
I am an author and had my first book published last year. That was an young adult but only one person bought it. It was in july and as you know everyone is on vaction. I take it teens don't read any more.