Origional, and a great peice by you!

I like the use of metaphors and similes. It always makes things more interesting. The way you re-wrote the first part was cool too:)

ooh i loved this! amazing as usual! you tell such great stories through your writings. Great job!

"The frosting on my heart was washed away by his tears

Hot ribbons streaming through the empty gaps in my heart"

I loved those lines. Very well written. Don't worry, I'm feeling sort of uninspired right now too.

"Last night, the white gathered on the fields." How sad--the snow blankets the earth in slumber.

"Life turning back to a swirl of grey." Excellent line. It's strange how the weather often has the ability to affect us.