I like the idea of taking the legend and re-writing it but i think you could have done so much more with it. I felt it was too similiar and there was no depth or reasoning.

I think you should have gone through it slower and tried to explain their love so that the ending touches us more.

I like the mother's advice in her ear it was fitting. The tone is good too, like a your telling a story to a group of intent listeners.

Overall it was an enjoyable read. :)