1) I'm sorry, but "swim out a ways" doesn't make sense to me. Um, is there a typo?
2) What?! Troy has murdered an innocent old man? Oh hold on, I think that Troy is guilty of manslaughter, not murder.
3) The twist in this chapter is freaky but interesting. Yay, one more chapter!

1) I've always assumed that rich kids are excessively polite towards their parents and teachers, though they might swear a lot behind the adults' back. ;) Anyway, I'm happy that Troy has become kinda polite in this chapter, instead of becoming increasingly rude.
2) “You see, Father, I am not a catholic, but I am in need of spiritual guidance.” (I'm smiling now, because I'm in need of spiritual guidance too. The well-meaning priest is downright hilarious.)

Oh dear, I'm afraid of the hag. She might have been a witch, who knows?

Cool, Starbuck as in Starbucks? The coffee shop. Not being mean or anything and um... what's a Kappa?

This was a REALLY awesome chapter. It was like, a bite in the ass for everyone Troy happened to meet. XD

When Troy went to Kendall's place, I was a little wary of what he was trying to accomplish. But when we found out that he needed a ride, I was like, "Oh, okay, as long as he doesn't do anything stupid, that's alright." But no sooner was the thought out of my mind, Troy had up and told Ken that he was a freakin' kappa! AUGH. ;) Talk about being subtle. Ha-ha.

So, this kooky, old Asian lady is being...well, kooky and old. And then she goes and makes him do this FREAKING IMPOSSIBLE task of killing the FREAKING LOCK NESS MONSTER. And then the dumb-ass goes ahead and tries to do it! I mean, come on! I know you were a complete and utter dumb-ass, but that actually takes the cake.

Woah--so THAT'S what happened to the old man. At least he died with some dignity--and Troy actually had some sense before he killed the man. It was a slightly touching scene, in a twisted way. LOL.

I loved the conversation with the Scotsman. I was like, "Ha! I would so kick someone's ass to get my lemonade back, too!" XD But it totally opened Troy's eyes, and when he went back to San Fran, he went with a vengeance. :D

I really like how Troy killed--the woman totally had it coming, though. But the way he did it...priceless.

I also liked the little "and after that" you tacked on at the end. It was nice to see how Troy over came his...er, "disability", and was able to go into a field that he would have an advantage in. :) I especially liked the last sentence. It was pretty awesome. :P

Really great job, Sky. I really liked this!

Sid

Hey I like the way this story ended! The wording was quite hilarious and unexpected and it just goes to show what an awesome writer you are. Good job and I can't wait for your next piece of work! :)

FAntastically short and brilliant. Its a pity it wasnt longer though..

Interesting. I loved Polished Pebbles, and was sad to see it taken down, too. This is a different take on the kappa, almost. I liked it (:
Faith

haha i liked the ending

-fangirl squeal- Sky! You're a maniacal genius! XD What a way to have Troy find what he is. Man, hard-core.

That poor girl...scarred for life, I'm sure. But I couldn't really tell, considering she was giggling up a storm, and seemed reasonably sane. Something tells me we're going to see her next chapter...

So, Troy has committed his first murder. Let's throw a partay! I mean, it's not everyday a newly turned kappa kills his first meal! ;)

Ok, this may just be me, but Troy seems kind of...HIGH to me. I mean, not in the "snorfing-coke" kinda way. Like, his head is always in the clouds. He is freaked about his, ah, "condition", but he's kind of like,"Hm. This is strange." If I were him, I would be hovering over a bridge, wondering if my jumping over it would really kill a freak like me. Wow, did THAT sound emo? ;P But Troy is taking this situation almost reasonably well, considering the fact that he hasn't gone to anyone, besides the internet, yet.

Finally, the truth is unraveled! He knows the ASIAN LADY STRANGER FROM THE VENDOR WHO HE SHOULD HAVE NEVER TAKEN THE DAMN DRINK FROM is the sole reason of his transformation. Serves him right. That's what he gets for being a dumb-ass.

A side note: I love how Troy said "Fuck me in the ass" after he was pondering why he ended up naked on the beach, and thought that someone had raped him. (I loved how he instinctively went to his ass. LOL)

Really great job! I'm sorry the next part is the last chapter. :( This is really good!

Sid

EPS! HURRY HURRY MUST KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!

haha this chapter was funny. Until Troy found out he killed a 72 year old man of course!

AW. This was an uber-depressing chapter. :( Poor Troy. (Why I was about to write Tony, I'll never know...)

Man, this guy's problems do not take short cuts. I mean, DAMN. His girlfriend broke it off with him to hook up with his rival, and he was kicked off the swim team because of his "allergies" to chlorine. SUCKS. And then he still has his, ah, "puberty problem". This guy has a lot on his place. I sincerely hopes that it all gets better for him.

This chapter was really well done--the pain and sorrow were wonderfully illustrated. I loved it!

May I add, that fight scene above--and under--the water was AMOZING! It was so intense, and suspenseful and whatnot. Great job!

Really nice stuff, Sky! I can't wait until the next chapter!

Sid

What? Plagiarism scare? This may just be me being ignorant, but this doesn't sound in the slightest familiar. Probably just some paranoid and/or jealous bastard. ;)

If I haven't made it clear, I rather like this. This chapter made me like it even more! I think I really like it because, of course, because of the good plot. But also, because of this POV. I don't think I've ever read something with this kind of third-person omniscient kind of thing going on. And I rather like it.

So, Troy is going through some fucked up puberty. Nice. ;)

So, he's a rich white kid with no manners and was born with a spoon in his mouth? Lovely. Well, this has been a wake up call for him, I'm guessing.

Man, this is so interesting! X3 I love it! Reading on!

Sid

Wow. I would not survive writing like this. I would make so many mistakes...But you, Sky, will probably not make any mistakes. Because you're WONDERFUL. :) (Yes, I am kissing up. Don't judge me.)

Hm. Troy is kind of a dumb-ass. I mean, hasn't anyone told him not to accept anything from strangers? Especially not creepy old Asian ladies with probably half of her teeth missing. (Though it is later revealed that she does not, indeed, have any teeth missing, that is totally besides the point.)

Geez. Troy is totally in deep shit. HA. Serves him right. And might I add, Troy has a crappy set of friends. Any friend who tells their friend to drink a mysterious concoction from a complete and utter stranger is bound to fuck you up sometime in your life--exhibit A, anyone? At least his girlfriend had a little sense. Though I didn't see her doing anything daring, like knocking the drink (if that's what it was) to the ground. But, I will give her props for trying.

Nice first chap. Very intriguing--makes me want to read more. In fact, I will!

Sid